TIME FOR A NEW POST

This is some shit I was doing for school,  a first attempt at digital comic pages.
I chose to retell the story of Pinnocchio, updated for the cybernetic age. More or less self explanatory.
Some liberties have been taken with the source material.

Not total shit for a first attempt.

Many lessons learned. In future will stick to much smaller palette.

Shoulda Woulda Coulda

Need to totally redo type. Need something friendlier, easy to read. Make overall line quality/thickness more uniform, consistent. Less fiddly detail, more consistency in terms of physical proportions, make background easier to read, more defined environments.

CUT TEXT IN HALF. too much talking. I like the dialogue but its just too much.

Also that hand in the last page looks fucked.  Maybe get rid of it.

Next time....

Onglau's workshop

Onglau is a cyberneticist, medical tech, inventor, armorer and tinkerer. He is ancient and wise, and once, long ago, incurred a debt to a powerful man. He now swears an oath of fealty to this man, and now devotes his life to it. His master is the mercenary Lord Martepperhaupson, and he serves as his private body engineer. More on Onglau and Martepper later. Rough sketch panels done mainly for fun and to illustrate central, circular and diamond composition for D&C class.

1 km west of town

Here is a one shot single page story, a minute or so in the life or Arus of the Twelve. Here he is taking position outside a town and surveying the scene. No dialogue or exposition required, I figure. More on him later.

Caillo is trouble complete

the finished 4 panels.

maybe ill do some more work at some point...

looks done to me.

Caillo is trouble 2 with tone

panel 2 with some tone added.

Caillo is trouble 1 with tone

Panel 1 again, this time with some more hatching in pen, and layers of tone added in PS.

Caillo is trouble 2

Page 2 of Caillo's vignette.
We see Caillo scan the room, locate surly, menacing, yet generic bad guys, and approach.

Tone to be added eventually.

Caillo is trouble 1

This first real post is a work in progress of my current school assignment for cinematic story development, by the legendary Ken Steacy, in which I tell a very short story in 4 (or so) pages.

I chose a minute or so in the life of one of my characters, Caillo Deveraux. Caillo is a young (at heart), brash, reckless and impulsive child who is prone to violence, outbursts, swearing, drinking, and is increasingly resentful that her girlhood dream of becoming a princess was ended when she was infected with a sentient synthetic nanotech self propagating symbiotic organism called the K virus. She often expresses her resentment by entering shady establishments and picking fights with shady individuals; wherever possible, several times her size.

The first page sees her walk into a bar, as the story goes. More pages and further detail / ink to follow.